Jenn Heldt’s post about her review of an amateur blog was one of my favorite posts of hers. She choose to do her review on a blog site that I feel really would attract college students because of the humorous rewrites of previous professional articles. She did a fine job of drawing me in with details about what is typically posted on the site. I like the way she explained how the site works with all the links and what everything means. These details would help an interested reader be able to easily navigate the new site. Putting the fact in the review about how popular the site is, is also a helpful attention getter because a reader of her review might notice that and want to check the site out just because they feel like they might be more in the know if they did.
In future essays though, she might want to stay away from writing in conclusion in the first sentence of the actual conclusion. If she wraps up her ideas well enough a reader will be able to understand that what they are reading is the conclusion without the “in conclusion” to hint them towards that assumption. Another thing she might want to think about doing is making sure she puts a link up of the site she is doing a review about. Her review really made me want to check out the site but there was no link on her page to direct me to the site. Doing this could also draw in more readers.
After reading Jenn’s review of Gawker I was pretty much impressed. Her use of details and descriptions really persuaded me to want to view the site to check it out for myself because I like reading things of that nature. In future papers I would definitely keep up the good use of detail because with that a reader will never get lost or confused so as long as you keep it interested you won’t lose the reader.
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